š„ Eyes on the camera
Describing shots on the page, and writing characters speaking to the camera.
This weekās rebroadcast brings together posts on writing for the camera and writing for characters talking to the camera.
Iām currently banging ideas around for a script, but have a question concerning the implementation of camera angles/shots. Should these be written into the first draft as you envision it in your head, or are they best left until you write a final shooting script?
āRoss
Until the movie is in theatres, thereās no such thing as a final shooting script. During production, and even during editing, the script itself is subject to change.
In my opinion, every draft of a script should be shootable, with the same level of detail, clarity and professionalism. Scripts do change to a small degree when production begins, with every scene being numbered, and a byzantine system for keeping track of changes. But the words themselves are no more or less specific at this stage than any other.
If a director has specific camera angles that they feel necessary to put in the script, they get put in the script. But more often, these non-story details are handled by storyboards or shot lists, rather than the screenplay itself.
Is it possible to put to rest the largest screenwriting controversy, CAMERA ANGLES? There are a lot of people who say camera angles donāt belong in a spec. [But] if you read scripts written by the writers who do sell, they nearly ALWAYS have camera angles. What I see all over the net is a large subculture of new writers excluding camera angles and not selling, while those who have advised them to take this route ARE using them and selling. One professional writer who suggests they be used goes as far as to say that these other pros suggesting they not be used are doing so to deliberately misguide the younger writers positioned to take their jobs.
āZD
Youāre uncovered a vast screenwriting conspiracy, ZD. William Goldman and his crack team of Writerās Guild assassins will be visiting you shortly.
You actually make a very good point. Most of the classic screenwriting books and instructors will tell you to never use camera angles, because it hurts the readability and angers the director. While they have a point, Iād caution you to be suspicious of anyone who lays down hard-and-fast rules.
Speaking as a member of the pro-angle faction, Iāll make the case that reading a screenplay should give you the sense of watching the movie. Since camera position is a crucial element in the cinematic experience, there are times when itās appropriate to mention it, just as it can be necessary to point out costuming, or music, or effects in order to let the reader know whatās what.
That said, I almost never use the words "camera" or "angle" in my scripts, because I think those words do tend to disrupt the flow. Rather than write ā
ANGLE ON: The truck SLAMS into the gunman.
Iām more likely to write ā
THE TRUCK
SLAMS into the gunman.
ā which uses a slugline to indicate that this a new and important shot. Along the same line, rather than say, "The CAMERA CRANES UP over the field," I would say, "we RISE OVER the field." Since the camera is the audienceās eyes, using "we" or "our" makes sense to me.
But Iām not the last word on the subject, nor can it ever really be put to rest. Although none have said it to my face, some of the directors Iāve worked with probably hate the way I move the camera on the page and wish I would stop doing it.
Ultimately, writers have different styles that work for them, and my best advice is find an approach that suits your taste and the material. There are no absolute rules.
I want to know more about proper formatting of the new documentary aesthetic thatās been brought about by shows like The Office and Modern Family. Iām referencing specifically the ironic or conspiratorial glances into camera, the unexplained interview shots. These shows seem to have the assumption that thereās a documentary crew present. I love that! And I love the potential for humor it brings about.
My question is this: how would that be written in a script other than through the use of āinto cameraā? Is there a way to indicate that an entire film or pilot would be shot in this manner? Iām also interested in your general stylistic take on this and whether or not you think weāll see this approach used in feature films successfully?
ā Ashleigh
The faux-documentary style has detractors, but I think it works very well in the two shows you mention.
Each show will have its own house style for how they format it in the script,1 but itās usually handled in the slugline when the whole scene is directed towards the camera:
INT. LIVING ROOM ā DAY [INTERVIEW]
MARK
No. Iām not disappointed. Not at all. Surprised, sure. Dejected? A little. Angry maybe, but not furious. I guess Iād say Iām ādisappointedā and leave it at that.
These shows tend to treat the camera as an unnamed character who either (a) is aware of something other characters in the scene arenāt, or (b) might take something embarrassing out of context unless clarified.
If a character is directing a line or a look to camera, call that out. (If it helps, think of ācameraā as a producer standing right next to the lens.)
CANDY KANE
It just seems too big to fit. Maybe if we greased it up or something.
Laura gestures to camera -- see?
Reference the camera sparingly. Unless the point of your script is the documentary itself (c.f. The Comeback), youāre likely to undercut the comedy or drama by acknowledging that characters are aware their actions are being filmed.
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